Wednesday, September 1, 2021

Detective Brad the Banana

One fine afternoon Detective, Brad The Banana was waiting for a call but no one would call. When Brad was about to leave, he heard a ringtone”BEEEEEEP  BEEEEEEP.”  Brad got silent. This was his first customer at his new job. He picked up the phone then he heard a familiar voice,”Is that you Mrs Mcrose?” “Who is this?” she said, ``It's me Brad!” I replied. “Oh it's you, why are you calling from this number grandson?” “I got a job as a detective. Now I'm Detective,Brad the banana!”  “I’m so proud of you! '' replied grandmum. “Thank you!” I said “Now… what's the case?!” “Ok so last night I was having porridge. It was splendid! Anyways while I was eating I thought of adding my...secret most best and yummiest ingredient though it's very secret and so I went to go grab it and…..IT WAS GONE*starts to cry* and then I ran to my room and the porridge was on the dining table and I think someone snuck into my house because when I was in my room I heard some noises and also when I went to go back to eating and take a bite I did take a bite but then I fainted when I woke up I was in the hospital and I was there for HALF A YEAR!! Als-ok I now know anyways what does the person look like. Well….. She had black leather pants and curly 

Brown hair with blue ocean eyes she was very attractive. 

It's like she has an attractive spell, ok thanks for the details I said how did you catch her? You know how I said that I heard noises well 

I went to check it out and that's when I saw her. Ok so do you know anyone who has blue eyes and curly brown hair? Actually yes I do, I know 6 people!

Is that it? I said yup she replied can you show me these

people I said ok! She replied again we drove across the street

And I said is this the place? Yes she said outside came

Young women with blue ocean eyes and brown curly hair they all look so similar! I said

I know she replied anyways it's time for me to ask questions 

There was one lady named Mary. What were you doing last night I asked Mary 

“Why do you have to know?!” It's because I'm a detective and I’m right now asking you about this case I said. Ok go on….Alright so what were you doing last night?

I said. I was at the cinemas all night with my friends she replied ok what time did the movie finish I said 8:15 she replied the next one ladies name was Maddison she was 27 years 

old where were you last night I asked. At home she said 

What were you doing I said I was listening to music all night long she replied ok I said 

The 3rd ladies name was Rose she’s 38 years old 

I asked her what was she doing last night she replied I was eating my dinner and watching TV ok and what time was this it was at I said it was at 6:34 PM she replied then Brad thought 

It can be her but I won't arrest her yet there are more women it can also be one of them

So he replied with an ok. Then came another lady she was marvelous

Then she sat down on the chair and glared at him

Then Brad  said ok ummm what were you doing last night [the ladies name was Emily]

Then Emily replied outside walking on the concrete what time was this Brad said this was at 7:00 she replied wait what!!!! That was the same 

time Mrs Mcrose saw a lady inside her house but anyways there are more woman so he didn't report here straight away 

Then came the next lady. She  looked like she didn't want to come, which was suspicious Brad thought. 

Ok so what were you doing Brad said ( the ladies name is Olivia)

I was checking out how cool Glen Taylor is and I like Room 9 especially! She said well they are an amazing class Brad thought ok what time was this Brad questioned 

5:30 she replied alright Brad said  he got quite then he gasped

ITS EMILY he exclaimed then Emily ran away brad chased her then they finally caught her after that Brad called the police 

And they put her in jail for 10 years!  Brad was proud 

of himself I saved the day he said then Mrs Mcrose walked to Brad and gave him a hug. Thank you Mrs Mcrose said 

No problem! Brad replied.

THE END

4 comments:

  1. I enjoyed reading your complex story Liana. I agree with you about Glen Taylor and Room 9. :)

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  2. Hi Liana, I like your story, problem and resolution. You used good powerful descriptive words and synonyms to add interest. Try to use punctuation in your writing as it helps your reader understand your ideas better. Ka pai!

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  3. Great to see that you mentioned about our wonderful school and class too:-)

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  4. That is a great story Liana. I enjoyed how you questioned then illiminated people.
    I like reading detective stories. Well done. Mrs Vaevae

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